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Old 02-15-04, 02:04 PM   #2
SyaNidal
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whack... this was really horrible...
it had no wordplay what so ever...
horrible rhyme scheme... shitty multis,
and poor punchlines that sucked...
no metafors, You need to elevate
your battle rap ALOT...
this is a shitty battle verse...
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