I thought you said this was slept on? Lazy ass fruit.
However, this WAS good. I enjoyed the lines and the flow. Good message mixed up there aswell, but mainly the content is what drew me attention. I enjoyed this, and I must admit I haven't peeped a lot of your work. But thanks for mentionning this thread to me.
Quote:
but of course
you can net the windows and spray a myst of molecular police
however
there'll always be a hum to wake you from your sleep
and the swat team keeps
missing by a mile
and thus
in a beat of wings..
i spot a body of warmth
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The "beat of wings" segment was sick - nice imagery.