I'm switchin it up..Make this Wannabe Blue Like Lilo and Stitch
Putting A Car In Reverse And Hittin Female Dogs Is The Only Time You'd Tag A Bitch
good opening.. metaphor is there, punchs were alright
Just Relax, Your Wack I'm The Ultimate Weapon Of This Entire Rap
Pile Uneven Numbers In Your Head, Just To Show How The Odds Are Stacked
punch could have come better with it.. the meta was dope though, good overall wording of it, cept it could have been evened out more
My Punches Like Steppin On Nails With Shoes, They Pierce through Your Sole
Like A Highly intelligent Pillsbury Doughboy, I'm On An honor Roll
similie wordplay here was good.. a little played though but not bad.. lacked on directed punchs though
Profile Says He's Unknown, But I Know Your Location Is A Gay House
I'm Known To Serve Cats Like You In 10 Minutes.... Like Chinese Take Outs
eh this could have been worked alot better.. wording was off i thought, again meta was alright but lacking on the punch, the one you did have came off played
He Hate Me?? Thats original...Rod Smart...that name ring a Bell
This Guy Was Stumped.... Couldnt Think Of A User Name
..........................So He Stole One From A Guy In The XFL
this ending was alright, good personal shots. the bar it self needed soem working, help with flow, it went alright for the most part.
Overall i thought you had a good verse, with alright metaphors a little wordplay and some ok punchs when you accually threw them. but you need more consistency for this battle since it is one
once i blaze the lead its ova, hit ya face n head n shouldas //
hav ya skin lookin like u had a case of melanoma //
openign is ok..but the punch is self lacked, structure is basic and the flow was alright but needed work
yea this fruity dude soon to be doomed //
only thing tight about u is ya looney tunes fruit of the looms //
a better connect would have helped this bar alot.. the metaphor was alright and it did connect except not all that hard.. punch was eh, ok
ain ya parents, but im able to ground ya //
treat ya lips like loose office sheets when i staple ya mouth shut //
more inners would have helped your verse here and everywhere else as well. metaphor is played ithink punch isnt really there
Mentality being giving so much head his own brain is empty //
but I’m regulating this bitch like a PI MP //
flow was ok.. the metaphor was alright not much though. the punch was decent, but needed a better follow through to really help it out
so next time you want to get sliced to bits //
call on HE HATE ME, and i'll bury'ya with my spit
ending could have been more here, the punch isnt much and the metaphor is basic.. self boasting
over all you had alright shots, with some alright metaphors for this battle.. you could have tryed harder with the punchs, they really lacked in strength i thought. rhyme scheme could have used better flow to it, as well as multis. ok verse i suppose...
Vote- Mentality
Took it with better metaphors, the punchs were about equal i thought but mentality did connect a little more.
Drop an honest vote, then ill come back and poll vote for you
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