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Im gonna be as honest as possible for you....now when i saw the title "lunar dreams" i thought that this was gonna be some sci fi adventure type piece....you convey that message with most lyrics.....but you really strayed off topic with that donald trump line...dont input weak lines just for the sake of rhyming...filler material is a sin....just always be at your best....this piece is really too short to really be telling me anything you know?...is this a narrative story or what?.... flesh this out more and use a little more imagination....im out (RETURN THE FAVOR BY HITTING UP MY OPEN MIC IN MY SIGNATURE)
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