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Old 02-16-04, 02:14 AM   #2
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ok well you didn't say anything that hasn't been said before by somebody else (and better)

but otherwise your structure was ok and the vocab decent... tended to lose the rhyme in a couple spots like the whole last part....

make u my personal outhouse, my personal urinal
whipe my ass wit ya eyebrows str8 up murder u
cuz thas juts wat i do i got much to prove
and believe me ni99a not much to lose
^weak finish man, sorry

think outside the box and you will go far on this site....

{Peace}
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