first piece ive seen of yours..
not bad at all
the opening 4 lines were really cool..some intellect and depth in those..
the piece as a whole was nice...u had some good imagery thrown in

'Hope sprang elate, a ray of light through curtained dark
Dove through the holy portals, the heat that bathed my heart

liked it..
try and check more of your drops..

oh yeh..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113145

drop a reply if u have the time
pax