sadly slept on... (like my stuff ..heh)


again great use of english language utilised thruout the piece
not quite as abstract as some of your previous stuff but seemed to find a medium
worked well..

'This is how I focus daily, stabbed in the back by my focal point
^fukin ill

'I'm tired of confidence, coaxing my optics, now- sleeping partners
I have this dream- I'm the 3rd inhabitant of Edan....weeding gardens
^as above

have to say the opening lines reeled me in..but in fact the whole verse was opening lines
delight to read
and the ending capped it off with a finishing touch of quality
really liked the way you rhyme words and dont look for that easy option if you comprehend
eg wife/life type shit wont be found in your text
which can only be a good sign