I didnt like the piece, it seemed like just ramblin. It sounded like it was meant to mean sumtin but i have no idea wat. I do get some lines, about the "words are bonds", those i completely understand. The lines were you talk about other things, thats where i get lost. You need some work on this poem, it seems to have a deep message(not sure wat it is) but i think it does, make it longer. The vocab was very simple, used. Strange format, sumtimes almost rhyming, sometimes not rhyming at all. structure is good. I felt no emotion at all, just like talkin. well thats just my opinion, keep workin man. g luck'

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