LOL, you and your "short" story's. anyway. very well done my man, I don't know how you can have the gumption to sit down and right a 500 bar essay like this, but whatever it is that drives you to do so, would be most welcome in my repetoirre. but anyways. nice piece, good vocab, decent flow. I have always loved your imagery and this piece is no exception. very good job, keep em coming, and use a smaller font lol, makes the structure look better. 8/10