It was a cool piece, the vocabulary wasn’t there.
Anyways the story reminded me of my past bully in
Junior high school I wanted to slap the taste out of his
Ugly mouth. So you brought back imagery from the past.
So you succeeded and doing a painted picture story line
Nicely done. Your structure was just in a essay form
Which I usually do so I can’t complain elevate on the vocabulary
Fam it would had made this piece Great. However overall nice
Constructed piece.


Peace….if you can I want some critique on my peace called
H.I.V Positive or Negative..