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Old 02-17-04, 04:05 PM   #15
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OK, this one was a much better battle...

best punch:

Last time he paid Intox to knock my, verse thas full, of, personals,
But this time Ima rob him of everything, miniskirt g-string, purse n all;
^^LMFAO at this.... but fix ya structure, get rid of the commas

John - you should have took this one too, judgin by your skill level... but ya opener was misleading (acts like a punch, set up like a punch.... where's the punch?) and I didn't really feel much of the verse though I did like this:

"Ya trapped in wackness like it was tha matrix..you ain't a vet
Kay's on tha phone to leave..
.....But I pulled it from tha outlet!"
but the rhyming was iffy...

other than that, nothin worthy of a win.... so....

Kay - obviously heated from your last battle, you took it out here and did fairly well. Your comma-based structure was so aggravating that I almost gave it to John... but I'll give this one to you for better punches, but clean up your structure. That is all.

vote - kay
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