thought ya scheme was good, with decent transitions for most.... except the line begining with 'a soul reborn' that was sloppy, ya just changed the rhyme to abrupt..... but like i say i liked the majority, nice level of rhyming, again tho one or two places the rhyming seemed a bit forced, jus a bit......jus giving ya some honest feed.... unlike most.... but i think this is far better than some ive read from you.... topic is a bit played out, but you hit it nice..... keep em coming..... lataz