This wasnt too bad at all......It was pretty basic but overall it was pretty good......I like your messag as well.........People are gonna come in here an tell you that you dont have enough vocab an all this other junk but........ima tell you as if im trying to help......an i really am cause i wouldnt wanna steer you wrong.........keep writing........the more you do the faster youll run out of vocab to express things then youll go in search for new words on how to express everything.........i see potential........dont let what people say bring you down........keep doin your thing........peace!! hit up my open mic.......its link is in my signature.....an welcome!