it was a pretty good piece with negatives and positives. The story kinda started of the same as it finished with it no real end or nothing if you kno what i mean.. the structure was good and you did get an image in my head... Not much complex vocab which suited the piece well. I enjoyed it... but some of your other work was better... still props...

plz return a fev
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