dude,
yeah nice work I guess on it.
But English sonnets have 10 syllable lines and some range of in to 12.
You were hovering between like 11 and 16 or 17 sometimes per line.

You may not have to stick to that one for your teach but I'm just lettin you know dude.

Other than that it was alright. kudos to the good.
Since the overall product is fair I'll point out just a couple things that I wasn't too fond of but don't think these are too overbearing for the poem, it's still strong.

l. 7 -- "simply" - superfluous. It actually takes away from the end of the line and it's to extra syallables that drag it on.

and I would have thrown punctuation in there since the sonnet is heavily based on structure.
you closed well. Good luck with the mark .
Peace

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