yo im da type a person dat'll eat u up like a cannibal//
when you step up to (a real m.c.) ill cut yo skin off like hannibal//
my flows emit a roar showin these cats who b the real animal//
im a lyrical mythical cereal killla//
im a show these foos by the way i murder u that jason cant compete to this thrilla//
then i rid you from this world with my lil 9 milla//
imma let you know yo that these flows aint mockable nor are they coppable//
its a little hard but im still crossin impossible obstacles//
just trying to put you in a hospital,but now i know killin you is optional//
the penatration of my 9 goin through yo head is causin devistation//
and when i leave you azz on the ground dead yo body will be covered with infestation/

6/10 - better flow and vocab

HAhahahaha yo dats alright....
OK EVERY BODY CHEAK IT its inspecta sexy hear wif da new flow and ya know its gunna b a go
no i aint no hoe im da bro that fuk ya mumma in slowmo
lol you seem to like gunz how would you like 7 bullets in ya lungs
ya are new to da game and its a shame becuz all ya battlez are probebly lame
'boo ho' dat you wen i found out dat you were a jew im hitla wif a 22 what ya gunna do? oww no v1 are afta you they da real g's in this site so all ya gota do is sit bac and resite all da fright wif in ya body and understand you aint noddi riding da big red carz ya a little geek playyin wif toy space ship pretending to go to marz.Now for my amazing fenali v1 wating at ya door wif mahamid ali redy to whipa ya ass becuz he float like da butta flys and v1 sting like da bee's why becuz V1 ARE DA REAL G'S lolz sorry man dis my 1st time too

5.5/10 ok cud be better structured tho.

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