Can't vote -- not enough posts yet -- but I'd give this one to furoshis. Dagreatest has nothing to bring but poorly executed faggot jokes. The format made it tough to follow his flow, and a lot of his rhymes were sketchy. First suggestion: even if you keystyle your stuff, at least go back and format it into readable lines that fit the meter so you don't lose points for sloppiness. Second suggestion: think of some put-downs other than "you're a fag".

Furoshis (haha) was focused on rhyme schemes and did okay with those, but got carried away with some crazy long lines toward the end. Even if you have a machine-gun delivery, that mess is no fun to read. Chop it down to the essentials or make one line into two or something like that. Pretty solid battle verse though.