Ok, I'm new to rappin'. And this is my first freestyle I created. Please let me know what I am missing and what I should take out, and all that other type of stuff.

Here it is:

Your rappin’ technique, is not what you expected/
You like William Hung, famous for bein’ rejected/
Hearin’ your rhymes, I’d say it’s time to elevate/
Your girl be wantin’ me, so you forced to masturbate/
You just fuck around, wastin’ everybody’s time/
Don’t know what you was thinkin’, don’t know what’s on your mind/
You go around town wantin’ a beef wit a cat/
If that’s true, I’ll add two large fries and a dog wit that/
Don’t fuck around wit a nigga, that you can’t touch/
Or end up gettin’ your ass killed, on the hospital bus/
Yea, it’s true, that I fucked you up alright/
Like Michael Jackson, your face went from black to fuckin' white/