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IP:
Adept *tried* to throw a hail of punches, but most of what I saw in his verse fell short. Let's take a look:
"worm unwind" -- nonsense
"cum-back / sperm on your spine" -- too much of a stretch; doesn't work
"flare-scrabble, scare the cattle" -- *shrug* no heat here
"carnival / fair battle" -- okay, finally some noteworthy wordplay.
"drunks at track meets" -- good image
"miami jersey ... pack heat" -- okay, but Miami Heat meta's have been done over and over and over
"shit locked up ... cuffed your ass" -- pretty good punch here
"pierce-in ... boston draft" -- kind of a stretch here
"hype and attention / swipes your dimensions" -- an okay multi
"So Ya Know I'll Take The Life Out Of You Kid When I Cut Ya Stomach Open Like-A-C-Section !!" -- good concept, so-so execution. Too wordy, needs to be shorter and punchier.
enygma opened with some shaky sentence structure and no hard punches for two lines before he really got going. After that, his stuff was as good as Adept's (although the draino line was a little stale), and had a better flow to it. Still, I think he really needed a stronger opener to take the win here. Those weak lines really pulled down his verse overall.
Vote goes to Adept this time. I'd like to see a rematch.
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