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Old 03-18-04, 05:25 PM   #6
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lk63, awful opener and the whole first few lines were real bad, and your structures real off take a look at dat boo doo's ,but thats all he had u on. some nice punches nice meta's best one and that do it your self water buckest one,U couldn’t have an outstanding line, if u wrote it with a Highlighter// jus dont use (//) and get better openers cuz the rest pretty good.
senboo, decent spit too , but no flow wit that, get some multies and try to go to a beat not jus straight lines seems too white. try stayin completely away from any gay lines people dont like 'em on here. rechecke your finisher, didnt get the punch but it had a good beat to it, try keepin doin all your lines like that. but other cats punches beat ya, them thangs were nifty haha, those and flows win battles jus so u knows.

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