umm...This didn't realy have a meanin'.....it seemed a bit basic and you the word "world" used twice for a rhyme scheeme.....i fink you should try to make this more complex and look at multi' and avanced wordplay and vocab coz this was close to Wack..i dnt mean to be tight but u gota speek your mind else you won't improve...keep tryin tho.....also make da line longer....good try...pz out

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