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Old 03-22-04, 06:00 PM   #1
swank
New to RB
 
Posts: 14
my first, constructive criticism plz??

IP:

just sittin in english wishin i could win this/
without reliable wack practice/
i need to learn this mathmatics/
relax its just a test and i only request/
that you take the gun away from your head/
so you can try to walk a stray from your dread/
i cant stop thinking about equalibrium/
you cant stop freaking at that stupid **** you bum/
next time i meet you, i hope i dont see you geeked too/
so sit back and rewind/
this is my first and wont be re-rhymed
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