Originally Posted by Mentalz

Looks like you have the basic funda-mentals down, if you work at it you can only get better.

You use everyday random metaphors, that just sound good together, every two lines don't need to rhyme everytime you lay down, most people start that way, though. Not tryin to say ima masta at it, cause im not, but that just sticks out for me.

Keep it up kid~