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Old 04-01-04, 09:30 PM   #9
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aight the breakdown........

Opener - Accomplishment...the words in your name shit was hot
Flow - none...didnt feel neither of ya flow
Punches - Accomplishment....the proky line was hot n ur otha punches hit way harder than k.o.'s
Personels - neitha of ya had any or decent personels
Multi's - k.o. had the better multi's so he got that category
Closer - Accomplishment had the better closer just because it rhymed but it was hot neways
Sustainment - Accomplishment kept the pace up the whole time so he got this
Enjoyment - Accomplishment had the overall better verse n came way harder n i liked his betta

ADVICE....

Accomplishment work on not stretchin ya lines (only a couple were stretched), you had nice structure,punches, n u had the sustainment. work on the flow, it woulda flowed but u had sum stretched lines. otha than that if u keep gettin betta u could be 1 of the top heads on here.

K.o. - id say u shouldnt battle a cat of his level of skill. u had a nice verse overall. work on not stretchin ya lines n that will help ya flow. your verse started off hot n afta 4 lines it jus fell of the cliff. u need the sustainment to get that categort n enjoyment. ya structure is straight. deliver harder punches n that will get u wins. ur llast 4 lines jus clinched a loss for ya so jus work on sustainment. aight man elevate n ull get betta. no hating jus givin advice. goodluck

VOTE - Accomplishment

return the favor please........
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=117844
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