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Old 04-04-04, 05:19 PM   #7
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okkkk breakdown

Opener - Accomp
Punches - Accomp
Flow - DON
Multi's - Accomp
Structure - Accomp
Sustainment - Accomp
Closer - Accomp
Enjoyment - Accomp

Accomp...you took this cat easily...nice verse...i felt your multis alot....ur punches were direct n hit hard...ya flow was tight but i actually felt don's a lil more....
DON...ok where do i start....well nice flow i lied it...u had multis but they didnt hit hard it was sorta like u jus put em there....ur structure is fucked up....u need to have direct punches that r aimed at him....dont jus tell bout wut ur gonna do...tell wut happens....use personals....fix how you write your verse....it makes u look worse than a newbie....
write lines like this...
write lines like this...
get my point....do sumtin like that cuz than people will actually wanna read yo shit...elevate n ull get betta......
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