Nice diss I'm new to this board who is R.I.P.?
fav lines:
baker boy are ya here you betta listen
you missed the target like gettin horny while pissin
^^^good average punch 1st line was ghey tho second was strong.
g-duce dont go i aint done wit you yet
ya whole crews dogs now they really need a vet(eran)
^^^strong finisher I liked it
IMO worst lines:
and that was when you read a dr. suess book and added a beat
you had the whole kindergarden class up on there feet
^so what u saying is he was ill when he was 4 years old, but now he's shit I think those 4 lines are shit IMO
your okay i aint that hard on you
just that your whole crew sucks the leader just like you
^was that supposed to be hard iunno.
ok this diss (if you can call it that) really lacked creativity, and complexity. Ur punchs where soft at best, and at timez u seemed to big them up
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Thats the worst thing u could do in a diss is big somebody up, and another thing I I I I I Me Me Me u gotta stop with this I, and me shit man no1 wants to hear some1 diss some1, and they talk about themselfs. The object of a battle is to unleash an all out attack on some1. think back to when em beat pop doc (yah it's only an example, and I know it was all writen), but you see how he just kept attacking and attacking u had the idea, just ur punchs weren't very complex nor affective. Also wtf where you're personals? I did not see 1 in that, and a personal is wayyyyyyyyy better then a punch any day.
This piece lacked complexity in punches. It had no personals, and wasn't overly creative all in all I would give this a 3/10 and the only reason you would get a 3 is because of those 2 decent punchs, and ur flow structure was nice. U might ask urself why ur piece wasn't that good well omg look at ur fucking word usage man a kindergartner could have wrote that shit lol. Next time dig up some dirt on opponents before dropping something against them it should give u more to work with. What I did like about this piece was the flow structure, and it didn't seem forced u got ur point across that they're assholes, and they treated u like shit
No hate just feedback keep elevatin read a book, and learn some new words.