jmob...it was hard for me to maintain a steady flow with your verse. next time right this topical to a beat or something...and maybe it will work out for u. structure it was hard for me to read steadily
kuniva..if this was a battle then maybe. but its a topical and u stuck to it more. structure and flow was the main thing that stood out. but the vocabulary usage jus wasnt up to par.
this is kind of like an indecisive win...but i vote kuniva. for really sticking to what the battle was about..

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