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Old 04-05-04, 02:23 PM   #1
WickedWays
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From: united kingdom, it sucks like vacums.
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Att, your structure is so bad, people are not getting your rhyme, i understood all of your verse, but thats only because i knew how to read, keep your rhymes on the same line, and if you gotta stretch it let the 'idiot' know, go out of your way to make it look simple and easy to follow

Your structure now is

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/ - means your rhyme, this is just an example, but you should be able to see what i mean, people arnt going to see where your rhyme is. It needs to be like...

**********************************/
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**********************************/

And if you HAVE to stretch the bar, LET OTHERS KNOW

**********************************
-***********/

^ I wouldn't suggest stretching a bar long then half its length - or it will mess your flow.

Anyway i think K' won this, after reading and getting both, id say att's downfall is (apart from his structure) that its a battle and you need hard punchs and nice little flow, make it funny, i didnt see much, no fresh concepts either... just think of jokes and add em in.... So, i vote KUNIVA