okay back away imma let the cat out the bag
the rumors are true triple_n is a fag
Gay jokes are played, not a good opener
at first i thoght you serious and your rhyms are hot
but you gotta dislocate are chins just to make are jaws drop
Good concept, bad wording
yea you beat suppream that's all that you'll get
he was just a practies run but im the real test
You shouldn't talk about the people he beats
you had one good line thay's all you got
put your brain on the railroad to regain your train of thoght
You just said all he's got are good lines?
go ahead use what i say twist em' if you like
cuz im ali your just bow wow trina fight
Not a punch at all
im a man of lil words a man of many faces
shove my boot so far up ya ass you'll be pissin out my laces
Still kinda basic but getting better
so if you forget my name it's the maddhatter
but you'll be able to read it off the wall cuz your brain will splatter
Shoulda closed wit the last line, this one ain't good

Your style was very basic and childish. You need to use some better vocab, wordplay, metas, flow, and structure. It looks like you just put this together in 20 secs. Take your time and read what you write.


This kid's only 13, battlin' a man thats deadlier than nado/
I'm a crush this bitch, an turn him into mashed patotoes/
Weak opener
Youngster's full of so much shit that I just have to laugh/
Cuz shit comes out when ya mommy runs ya bath/
Much better
You little bastard, you define the meaning of da word jerk/
He had to sign off early, cuz he forgot to do his homework/
Killin him wit personals
He got da nerve to challenge me, he end up da next dead/
Little boy called me fag and he hasn't even taken sex ed/
You shouldn't have fed from his verse but not bad
He's a little pussy, he's scared of his own reflection/
He goes to the doctor everytime he gets an erection/
Another good personal
Kids nowadays challenge vets, I'm a rip mad hatter/
I bet he hasn't even learned how to controll his bladder/
Ehhh.....Its startin to get a bit old
This kid's punches miss more then da batters of the dodgers/
He's jus a punkass whiteboy, that couldn't beat up Mr. Rogers/
Not a bad closer

Triple N came wit a lot harder punches, better flow and structure, personals hit hard, need I say more? Keep up the good work!

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