wow, that was actually decent.
why are you on rb relaunched? yeesh

my main criticism is that your repeated the same beginning for a good chunk of the piece...it would have been nice if you varied it up a bit. Said the same thing in different ways instead of the repetition.

"My void is natural, You have filled yours with your god, But it remains empty still. "

fucking dope line, in itself it represents the insecurities that lead to total faith, when in fact the faith reperesents nothing.
I'm not going to delve into this too deeply, but it was nice.

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