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Old 04-08-04, 01:45 PM   #13
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From: that Austin Tex 512 reppin Kileen to tha fullest
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AXIOM-tha bitch
DJ's chasing a victory, and it's playing hard to get.
I would've ended your career... but it hasn't started yet.
--good opener...almost played but not quite..soo...good opener

So when I trash this fuck, he'll be napping in the ocean.
I don't know what's worse, ya verse, or the fact that you're postin.
--good punches in this bar...i liked tha last line in it

It's true, I fucked your mom, but I didn't expect the condom to break.
So when I clown you, don't trip, I'm just correctin' mistakes.
--FIRST LINE IS PLAYEEEDDD OUTTT..second line wuz OK..still a lil played wit that one too

This battle's regressin, you'll feel bad as gays disperse.
You didnt say I was full of shit... until AFTER I ate ya verse.
--First line is PLAYEEDD..that's 2 in a row......second line is preety Heavy..i liked tha second line..nice punch rite thurr

Axe is the realest with rhymes, so expect me to kill this bitch
The way I shut this dummy up, you'll think Axe's a ventriloquist.
--hmm..OK bar...OK punches...OK vocab...overall OK bar

Lets play, like your verse came and I'll give you a sneek peek
Kid just came out of the closet, and it wasn't during hide-n-go-seek
--mediocre closer...first line wuz weak but tha last line wuz OK
OVERALL-notta whole lot of vocab...great flo...same structure as DJ-good...Punches good 8/10

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