You should do like a ghost and dissapear ..when it comes to me im ya main primal fear...
i see you stratin to shake when i come near...Battlin me is a bad choice i kould be the end of ya career..
both of these are way overused.. i hear that same personal against ghost each battle.. the second line is also too long i think
when i spit i might as well put my words on top of your head... cause theyre too complicated for you ..what i write with this lead..
aight.. that's my kinda punch.. pretty original
my words will put a niggas career in trauma ... wit my wordplay im more fierce and despised than that nigga osama...
dont strat cryin afterwards cuz i dont want no drama... i got enuff of it after your daddy found out i was sleepin wit yo mama...
already did the career thing above, but your worldplay and rhyming are pretty nice, last line kinda overused to, but still nice
ghost you made the wrong choice battlin me.. im postin up in this bitch for everyone to see...
that how sick i can really be... by the end of my flow ill be wanted by every crew and that i can gaurantee...
.. could just done "crew, i gaurantee" and the flow would have been nicer. not a great punch either
But now im unleashin the wordplay of a genius in a 15 yr olds brain... tryin to keep wit my words is drivin you insane...
aight, pretty good
what you lack i pick up in and get stronger.. ya verse is too plain..
You aint even posted yet but im callin it a victory... kuz ya styles more sloppier than a college dormitory...
"more sloppier" ... kinda a weak closer over all

listen it aint a nigga in the game that can see me/
nope u cant beat me better get 3 more wishez from a jeanie/
rush niggaz like dwight freeny leave u ass naked wearin a beanie/
the opener is in like half the battles i see... second line pretty nice, 3rd has a multi but i dont care much for the punch
u beat don d? wow dog big i should give u a round of applause/
but not with clappin im talkin wit a gun when i pull it from my drawz/
that second line has pretty bad flow, the first line is ok but you dind't really go anyway with it
so keep plotin on a victory an ill smash that pronto/
1 win got u thankin u a warrior like tonto/
pretty ok punch
got 2 gunz to give u shotz like a pair of free throwz/
wash the blood off my shirt and it turn to indigo/
weak....
flippin on niggaz like jack nicholson in the shinin/
come on now that shit u spitin u call that rhymin?/
like glass u just see threw so i must be diamond/
weak...
dont call me playstation just cause im in the game/
yo old rapz need restoration im heatin em wit the flame/
wit no hesitation them pistolz iz tearin u out the frame
that second line is pretty nice, the other two are just weak

Overall vote: Nope ... both y'all need more original stuff n work on your flow.

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