Albi
Ya structure was a bit stretched and dragged punches on till they barely scratched the surface. I liked the consistency in the rhyme but it was made harder to read. If ya dim down ya line lengh a bit and just go for straight punches u'll do better. u don't have to explain ya punches, would you explain to a nigga why you punched him in the face? lol. I got a lot to work with especially for ya first try.


Miss
I preferred the structure and flow. had a better punch.
say she can drop her verses deadly/
pullin' her notebook out sayin' wait til i'm ready/
Thats the best punch i seen in the whole thing. She kept her line lengths to a minimum, i like that. Makes it easier to evaluate. I was feelin ya consistant rhymin steady flow too. Ran at a steady pace too.

I'd say Miss takes it, it was pretty even, but miss had a better punch and structure.

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