Raw talent- okay this is honest voting here. your flow was satisfactory, structure is okay...but u had no punches. and your vocabulary was weak. what u need to do is come up with multies and punches and wordplay. yours was pretty basic so elevate seriously

L.I. - its obvious you are the victor in this situation. flow was a little off in some place and it was a little confusing to read cause of the bold text u used on some words. okay your vocab was fair. you had punches but they werent hitting but it was a little something to beat him. There is no need for bold text so everyone can see your punches thats real distracting. but what u need to do is use multies and a little bit of more personals. but overall solid verse. good.

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