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New to RB
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lol shady i don't mean to hate, but you need to check yah structure.
Punchs- aka
personals - aka (weak tho)
creativity - aka
wordplay - both (altho shady was confusing but I like that)
Multi's - aka
metah's - aka
flow/tructure - afa (definiatly)
shady dude u lost this battle because u don't have a rhymin scheme nor a structure. You tend to throw ur readers off, and u don't have any real punchs. I see u trying to throw 1, but ur structure is sooo off that it just weakens them. My advice look at how some of the other ppl on this board put out there verses, and spit there punchs. Now u gotta be origonal also because no1 likes recycled overplayed lines. Try and convert everything u can onto him in a simple flow which is catchy, and easy for ur readers to read. Something like 10-15 syllabels. Elevate more u got some nice wordplay tho
Aka u started off sooo weak I thought u might lose this 1, and that would have been pittiful. Ur structure altho better then shady's was weak, and also threw my off check yah line lenght drop some words if u have to. punchs where creative, and I enjoyed some off ur lines but u and shady both had alot of filler. Both of u need to do some homework on ur competitors to get better personals saying there from this country, and throwing in punchs about where he lives is soooo overplayed.
my vote aka
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