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good topic LI
LI-u had some hot shit u stayed on da topic u did yo thing
u had good structure i liked da story nice flow vocab couldve been a lil bit more creative..
but out the whole thing u get a 8/10

va-u alsohad a descent flow good struture good flow and u used better vocab then li both of yall really stayed on topic and urz was on target
8.1/10 barley got it kid still need 2 elavavte

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