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Old 04-14-04, 12:47 AM   #20
Oc6 The Caustic
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Posts: 184
From: Northern California
Yo

IP:

Breakdown homies:

$$UPREME:
Nice opener. You had a very good structure which keep your rhyme nice and solid, nice clean flow. You had the better Punchlines also, plus your personly's were on the spot:
"$$UPREME PISSES VENOM,IT WON'T COME OFF WITH CLOROX*
I'LL HAVE YOU THROWING YO SELF IN THE WASHER STUCK WITH SHIRTS AND DIRTY SOX*"
Thats the punch and personly's I'm talking about, I felt that this was one of your best. You came at him at the end, defending youself also, nice flow.

Chalk:
Your structure was very weak and all of your rhymes were basic. Get at him with more Personly's and punches. You had some punches but I felt that $$UPREME had better ones. I was feelin' your vocab and flow, just work on your punches and personly's.

VOTE: $$UPREME.


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