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My vote goes to Blaze...

Delon:
I'll "snatch your Necklass" then show the main-attractrion
When I shoot your Brain-in-fractions, that's called a "Chain-Reaction"

Not a bad line, necessarily; it flows well, decent multi though the "main-attraction" line sounds bit forced...I'd try and start a little more personal thought...generic battle opener...

i'll destroy your brain/till your body crashes like a derailed train/shatter everyone of your veins/just too watch you scream in pain/till they decalare mantally insane.

Again, generic battle shit. Nothing too clever.

i hope yo rymes are updated/and verbally stated/cause yo shit looks like somthing you just ejaculated.

Pointless...all rhymes are "verbally stated"...to state something you must make it verbal...generic...

i'll hit you with a full force to the abdomen/stab you with a javuline/leave yo ass so bloody they wont know which casket you in.

Same as above...

im comin at you with LYRICAL FORCE/cause when i strike i show no remorse.

Blah...

i stand alone/im the king of this throne/i'll beat you so bad just to hear you MOAN and GROAN/break all your bones.

Ditto.

leave yo ass in the middle of the desert strangled and raped to death/with duct over your ankles and a paper bag to take a breath.

Again, no logic...if you're strangled you're not breathing and, really, WTF does a paper bag have to do with that?

Overall, it does flow well; doesn't seem to get too stuck on syllables. Had some mutlis, but they were wasted on weak, generic punches...and, I admit, generic punches can win battles...but at least they have to be GOOD generic punches...

Juss_Blaze:

battle me? dog i end carrers if you step wid it/
have yo ass doin mtv shows, like Xibit/

Hmmm...I guess it depends which side of the underground v. commercial argument you're on, but most folks don't consder rocking MTV to be career-ending...

Im Blaze a.k.a. emcee with a sweet flow/
i see what u thinkin when i leave yo brains with a peephole/

AH! FINALLY! A good, strong, clever punch...That line should've been your first one.

you an emcee faker than a new hair weave/
the only time you blast guns is new on years eve/

Weak, played setup but followed up with a strong punch so it's forgiven a bit...

i got niggas shook, online digital flinching/
this aint rap, its a fukkin lyrical lynching/

Boring and generic...

yea. my rap style is sick, im a nasty nigga/
my bars blow shit up like an iraqi nigga/

I'm also not a fan of rhyming with the same word and the punch here just isn't strong enough to justify it....

you soft like butt cheeks, im grimy like mud fights/
you aint a rapper, the only bars you know serve bud lights/

Nice nice line...flows a little off but, again, forgivable...

its a TKO when my punchlines punch dude/
i leave you full holes like that yellow sponge dude/

The punch could've been good, the setup wasn't great and, again, with the same worded rhyme...

Yo Mr. Moderator, where you find these people?/
i eat these stray cats like chinese people/

Eh, not the worst line in the rhyme, but not that great either...more same word rhyme shit...

Dog, its ok if you wanna sing for a minute/
but next time you wanna battle dog, think for a minute/

Weak...never should've been the closer...You shoulda stopped at the Bud Light line..

Overall: You win cuz you had a few clever punchlines...neither verse was all the strong. Yeah, using the same word to rhyme can work if the punch is REALLY strong/clever, but doing it over and over just makes you look less creative and like you have a limit vocab.

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