Vote goes to WildFire...
Denver Max:
I'm extra strength, you're chewable tablets
I've got extra length, you've got disgusting man tits
Okay, decent multi but the punch sucks and the setup doesn't make sense...chewable tablets can be extra strength too...
I dont know you, but i bet you're fat
and if no one likes you, it's because you're fat.
This is just stupid. I guess I'm railing against this in lots of posts lately, but if you're gonna rhyme the same word at the end of your bars, at least make the punch really strong!
Wildfire huh? you're just a big wisher
i'm a wizard! (poof) now i'm a fire extinguisher!
Kinda clever, decent punch, decent multi...
Have you tried febreze? i bet your whole family stinks
and i bet they all hate you like you're jar jar binx.
This rhyme is SOOOOO fucking played. Jar Jar Binx?!
you better believe that's a star wars metaphor
but seriously, i'm white, what more could you be asking for?
Actually, it's a Star Wars "simile" because you said he's "like" something, you didn't say he is something...regardless, weak as a closer...
Overall: The rhyme is built on generic punchlines trying hard to sound personal; If Wild IS fat, then it's a personal...if he's not, it's just stupid. Didn't cover much new ground, wasn't all that clever; it flowed well though.
WildFire:
I'ts time for me to crush this cracker like he was a ritz
everything you just spit was crap, like you got the shits
I like the setup better than the punch, but it's not that strong enough to be an opener.
you'll never put me out with an extinguisher by your lonesome
"is it even a possibility to put you out?" the answer is no son
Flows a little off, wording's a little awkward...
jar jar binx? who the fuck are you kiddin?
your style is disgraceful, it needs to be forbidden
Set-up had some promise, didn't follow through as well as I would've liked to see...
cause nobody likes those weak rhymes but you and Jpoll
and thats only cause you dickride on him, usin birth control
Decent personal...
your rhymes arn't fly but lack substance so i consider them weightless
I'm happy for you, cause before you met JPoll you were always left dateless
Nice personal punch, the couplet is a little awkward and crammed though...
Now look at you, your best buds on the rapbattles.com
votin for eachother, you can't win with just the mic in your palm
good flow, decent personal...
I know when i drop this Jpolls gonna vote for Denver Max
don't matter tho cause you couldn't kill me with anthrax
This works to me just because Jpoll did...lol...
so i guess the voting will end up 5-1 and i end up winnin
if this was baseball, i won in the top of the first inning
Eh...wasn't impressed with this as a closer...
Overall: Liked that it was a lot more personal, a lot more relevant to whats going on right now, in this thread as opposed to being generic battle lines that could've been written against ANY opponent...That being said, it did flip into generic shit a bit that weakened it overall.
Nod to WildFire...