i got sum feedback

MADDHATTER
im probley too new to get in this open mic/
but not to new to know we have gunz equipped wit lazer sight/

are shit is cliff hanging leave you suspenful/
violent enough to make you a concreat stencil

make you afraid to speeck are name/
bare any name we leave you in shame

are rhyms are crazy make your memory hazy/
other crews dont faze me we kill groups daly

newest and truest member in the chryme sindacate/
step to us... you'll be on are hit list/
break you... and make you throw temperfits/
make your crew aboandon you and make you a misfit

we'll make ya'll scared to rap and leave ya'll to choke/
we'll put you in a box red wood or oak

your life span will be as short as a centermeter/
make it even smaller wit the cock of are millimeters/
and slicin noise of are meat clevers/
make you and ya crew run home like derek jeter

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