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Old 04-15-04, 10:09 PM   #6
PoLiFicK
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dis 1 was a lopsided victory even doe both of u need 2 elavate
but kbugg u need alot of work.....u didnt have no punches no wordplay,structure was bout the only thing u had

best line-if god gave out skill you waz never it/
i look at your punchlines but they never really hit/
^^ best line and dat get a 3/10 so yo verse wasnt on point

worsteline-your ryhms sound so gay/
i bet your mama ashamed of how she live wit you everyday/
^^ played out momma jokes not goin cut it pimp,gay jokes been ova wit...

untitled-yo verse want consitant eitha u had like 1 punchline the whole time lil bit vocab alright structure needs work overall

best line- really dunno why you prefer 'ASSES' than 'clit'//
maybe your mama was born without one, instead she was born with a 'dick'//

again momma jokes played out but on dat 1 i had 2 laugh LOL

worste line-fuck this nigga, you cant even spit//
you think your a killa, your justa piece o shit//

^^ not good 4 a opener

bug-
punches-3/10
flow-3/10
structure-7/10
start-4/10
finish-3/10
vocab-3/10
persionals-5/10
overall-4/10

untitled-

punches-4/10
flow-4/10
structure-7/10
start-4/10
finish-4/10
vocab-4/10
persionals-5/10
overall-6/10
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