"Streetsweepa?" come on lets get serious.....
Leave ya body bloody like a fat bitches period

ok ^^Black Thief that line was a good punch but try to
explain your punches with less wordin,an spit on some multis to your
verses thats all u need to knock oponents harder remember multis are
important..for example heres a punch line with less wordin and
mad multis

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=Pain? It Attaches To The Flow That Dispatchs With The Savage Of Ten-Hatches Testicle-Crush-Tactics In Best-Of-Blood-Matchs...

feelin me...
overall your verse came ok but work on wat iam teelin you... just trying to set
and example for u but master that your verses will come much better an more complex
u had some good an punches thou

let me xplain the wordin part

as I cut a smile under ya throat
watch ya choke
have ya in tha river watchin ya float
shoot out one ya legs....now u only got a crutch to lean on

have less wordin?n strong multis so people feel your shit more
an vocab also for example=

Un-destroeable like my thesis,storms to crush corpses-interposing-deadly liquids-
In-intoxication-through-yal veins-all yal-cells-parish-like contaminated rivers-yal-livers-die-With no suply-to-aplly fresh-water-continuing this internal-sizing-of my lyrical sickness-

u feeling the multis ok try to work on that it was some hustle for me when i was
startin but youll mastere that-

as for street sweepa basicly this goes to both add more vocab an make that shit
rhyme dont just throw in vocab in it will look ridiculous.try to make hard punches
with less wording and more vocab as in with rhymes watch in to it an make it flow

for example street sweepa u had some really weak lines

i won this battle so u can already cut my check//
i kno about ur girl, walkin round lookin like shes shrek//

ok this was really weak try to come harder for real.most of this u was saying u
got the battle won an shit try to come or practice on something like this
just giving u an example..

I'm winnin in this battle, astonishin' the board, makin 'em cuss!
Like the su-per-bowl, co-mmer-cial, soap in the mouth, afta hearin ya fuss!
Cuz, ya rhymes is played, out like re-runs, of chips and Hawaii!
Ya ended, Yeah this battle is over, by defualt don't tell me I already now(know, now=won rewound)feelin me.....

Vote=Black Thief

ok only reason my vote goes to Black Thief cuz he came shorter with
less wordin of his puches an lines and a bit harder but rember it aint about
clownin oponents talking about some ones girl u have to make people feel
the strong sick punches....peace

also those water gun lines never use them there played out and really weak.