I'd work on your struture, something like ...
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I'm tryin 2 get ya house rapped off in caution tape,
Go ahead keep thinkin I'm laced, I'll never be late.
You'll be hideing ya face just like the bitch off Kobe's case,
Its not good to be fucking wit Ace.
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This makes it look better and it's easier to read it.
Some parts seemed pretty forced, like you couldn't think of a good rhyme so you 'forced it'.
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I'll walk in ya house and watch ya kid get baked. Knock U down and watch ya hands and ya mouth get taped.
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Anyway, no hate... cause I enjoyed reading this. I'm just trying to help.