Thread: kl!k vs. cythis
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Old 04-18-04, 12:58 PM   #5
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Aight I can't vote cuz there's no crew vote, so I'll just give some feedback to Cyth:

Yo you had some nice punches in there, my favorite was the Nostradum one, because its really creative and is a nice original rhyme. You gotta work on your structure though, you have a lot of extra filler in there for the sake of multis I guess, but it fucks up your structure and takes the wind out of some of your punches. Mutlis really aren't that important in a battle unless its really tight, its flow and primarily punches/originality that make the battle.

try to keep all your lines between 10-15 syllables max, and generally 10-12 works for me. also, work on having more setup lines in there, it really adds to your punch.

Nice battle, keep elevating. Peace.
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