Aight.. the phone line is a play on the joke that "yo moma so stupid she tripped on the cord of a wireless phone." I get it... but nobody else seems to which means you probably gotta reword it. Overall, your verse was too much prancying around with wordplay, no hard hitting action... you can have wordplay and punches, but dont sacrifice the latter for the former. The closer, for example, had a nice original multi but a weak as hell punch.

Black basically won this for his hella nice closer, notice the mutli that is used but also a nice punch and he opened with his second strongest punch and a personal. That's how you do a battle, in my opinion. The middle three bars weren't great, work on that, but the open and closer get the vote.

Honest votes on my battle vs pp2 (link in sig).

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