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Old 04-20-04, 01:23 PM   #9
Shadows edge
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Alright.. alright.. quit the talking. Ok, real tight battle, but I was feeling enygma's verse more. Only thing that sucked about your verse was your closer:

"He's Stutterin, you should know how to spit it out, your Mother Did//
Check his sig, he is nice............. he just gave me Another Win//"

That flow is absolutely horrible, Did and Win don't rhyme, and there's barely a punch there. No set up line, the stutterin has nothing to do with what his mother did.. all around the worst closer I've seen from you. The rest you came pretty tight, the Malcom X line was kinda tight.

Marv.. you had it going at the beggining but just lost it here:

"dogg u got 10 wins u still here y u dont spit in da elevated front lines?? //"

that's a great set up line, you should have used it to go into a punch about he only battle herbs or something.. but instead you just left it alone, and your verse went downhill from there. you also had problems with structure/flow, some of your lines were way too long.

v/enygma.

hit back my battles in my sig..
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