Very nice.. I feel the emotion, especially at the end. Still wish you could have done more than the "wish he was mark" line.. also it seems to me to be less of a poem then a topical, seeing as how it lacks imagery and metaphore... overall a very powerful story, but you could have spent more time at the end on the emotion.

peace.

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