Im 13 and this is my 1st song ever written. tell me wut you think.

VERSE 1
yeah,yeah,when the wheels were turnin city to city/i found out yall bitches were still trippin wit 30-30/(really?)how silly/I find that fuckin outrageous/ stand up ta me ill call ya courageous/you betta hide that shit/for i confiscate that shit/Aks everywhere,ready to take out shit/lesse who got that betta aim o that glock/lesse who come out on top/you aint trying to blaze with me/you tryin to stand up to me/bust a move or ill pop ya youll find out quickly/gin n juice til i die/aint ready to die/before that ill put on a tie/30-30 tryin ta make it big/pshuch yall just a buncha pigs/dun try ta run that show/ its Tuqotm's show/till i stop to glow/

I dont really have a chorus yet

VERSE 2
yeah when i walk through town i see a shitload of mofuckin poseurs/all they ever do is jerk off boners/I aint got time for those fags/im too busy rumpin in between a womans legs/people tell me not to make rap a career/what? you want me to sit around and drink beers?/all day? what the fuck are you okay? id rather hump a dead camel wit my nuts shaved/rather than become a fuckin slave/to tha world of alcoholism/where for a beer id turn to fraudism/geesus man use yor brain/someone put it there to stay/put it to use for it rots away/motherfuckers aint got nuthin but beef on me/i gotta lot o time for i decay/so dont fuckin think im here to play/im here to stay/an dun go around sayin yous tha man/tha only man is He who is called I am/


tell me what you think.for yall who dont know,30-30 is actually 30 style,a shitty local rap band out to make it big.30-30 wants to mean 30/30 vision meaning hes better than everyone else.fuckin loser it makes no sense.w/e