Nice piece man i liked the flow of it. Rhymes were basic though

my favorite lines were

FIGHT FIRE wit WATER nigga and play da game smart//
build up pounds of courage, and TONS of heart//
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hold my head above, trying not to sink-in-da-mud//
spit my heart and replace ink-with-BLOOD//

In my opinion you need to up ya vocab and use more wordplay etc. because a piece like this needs some

peace
-TiK-

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