http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120529
^^^vote here since I voted in urs.
DeLeon,your flow man.You can't just go from a big line to a short line.It makes it uneven and it doesn't flow well.For example-
"spit your gay ass shit and try ta beat my rhyme/"
"motherfucka I aint got time to waste-take out my blade-slice ya face, you's fucken disgrace/"
Your punches were okay,but could have been better if you flowed it better.And I don't mean to go adding fillers.Just work a little more, man.
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